Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, many people around the world are more concern about their health than in the past. Some people believe that adding the amount of sports facilities is the best way to develop public health; others argue that this scheme is not enough. Personally, I strongly agree that increasing the facilities of sports will have little impact. To support my opinion; the aspects of both sides will be discussed.
Regarding the opinion that is support to establish sports facilities, firstly, sports clubs are very essential because some experts suggest that people need to exercise at least 20-...
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Secondly, not only does physical condition will be improved but sports also relax mental condition.
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