Some people say that professional workers, such as doctors, nurses and teachers, make greater contribution and therefore should be paid more than those sports and entertainment stars. To what extent do you agree?
It is true that since long time ago, until up to this days, profession such as sports stars and entertainment stars get to be paid more than a professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers. In consideration of the important role that doctors, nurses and teachers hold, I believe that they should be paid more than the superstars. This essays intends to share some reasons.
In order to be professional worker such as doctors, nurses or teachers, one's must undergo years of study and training. In addition, it require them to pay paramount of money in order to complete the study and training. Once they completed the study, they are required to be dedicated and play an important responsibility towards their nation. for instant, doctors and nurses are responsible to safe people's life and cure the sick. teachers on the other hand are responsible to mold the children through education. Moreover, people pay the blame to doctors and nurses if they cant safe the life of their family or parents would blame the teacher if their children did not excel in school. Not only that, these professional worker are often required to sacrifice the time for their family for the sake of professionalism such as working night shift or on public holiday. Lastly, professional worker are needed to always update their knowledge such as by attending seminars, research or symposium which in-turn require them to pay to attend such lectures. For the reasons mentioned above, I think professional worker are worth to be paid more.
On the other hand, sports and entertainment stars are not necessarily needed to be paid a lot for some reasons.Firstly, these superstars, they don't really make a significant contribution to the nation. Although they fight in the name of a country, however all of the winning prices will go to their personal matter. Additionally, most of the superstars would already gain benefit from sponsorship that uses them as an ambassador such as receiving royalty, freebies, allowances etc. It is therefore they do not require to be paid more.
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Sentence: It is true that since long time ago, until up to this days, profession such as sports stars and entertainment stars get to be paid more than a professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers.
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Sentence: Moreover, people pay the blame to doctors and nurses if they cant safe the life of their family or parents would blame the teacher if their children did not excel in school.
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