'Telecommuting' refers to workers doing their job from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology.telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expended to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. How do yo think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting
The advancement of communication technology in many countries encourages people to work in their home by telecommuting. While some people think that telecommuting help them to work easier due to its flexibility, I believe telecommuting also gives negative influence in society life.
Many people are helped with the development of communication technology especially in telecommuting because it will make working more effective and efficient. In the traditional system, workers should go to office to do their job, with telecommuting, people can finish their job at home or wherever they want. It means that they have more times to enjoy their life. It also makes working easier: people only need internet supported computer and they can be connected with all of their business relations.
On other hand, telecommuting can cause bad effect in society. People become more individual and selfish. They will prefer to do something by themselves, which makes them losing their interpersonal skill. In future, While frequent people choose to work in home, it is possible people do not need an office as place to work in. Whereas in the office there are still many jobs cannot be done by telecommuting such as office boy, cleaning service and so on. As a result, when the office closed, some people will lose their job. It will cause increasing of unemployment rate higher rapidly.
In conclusion, telecommuting not only gives benefit in people's life but also causes harm for society's life. People should use telecommuting wisely to create happiness and advantages for all citizens.
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Sentence: While some people think that telecommuting help them to work easier due to its flexibility, I believe telecommuting also gives negative influence in society life.
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