Young people in the young modern world seem to have more power and influence than any previous young generations. Why is this? What impact does this have on the relationship between old and young people ?
Towards the end of the 29th century, it is easy to see that technology has advanced widely and young people tend to catch new improvements easier than old people. So in my experience, as a 19 years old, young student, this is mainly because we learn easier and adapt new products and informations conveniently.
In the first place, unquestionably the one who cand understand new innovations and use them in his life will have more power and influence the others. Young people are more open and adaptable the changes than old people.This is probably because, they have more freedom and chance to improve themselves. For instance, my mother who is 56 told me that she could not get permission from his father to go to the library when she was 10. By contrast, when I was 10 she took me to the library by herself.
Secondly, we are living in a world which two years old kids play games on the ipads and they are aware that their parents are ready to do whatever they want. Undoubtly, they grow up with more confidence but after a while they turn selfish and spoilt children. Also, new generations are educated perfectly. Thus, they feel like they know everything better than their teachers and parents. As a result of this,there is an inevitable fact that this has a huge impact on relationship between the young and old people. They can not agree about respectabilty.For example, my cousin Ege who is 11 has been gone to a psychologist because of his attitude to his teacher. He claimed his teacher about nor knowing anything.
In conclusion, it is easy to predict that every new generation will be more powerful than old ones due to adapting easier to the fast changes of technology and use them in real life.
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Sentence: Young people are more open and adaptable the changes than old people.This is probably because, they have more freedom and chance to improve themselves.
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Sentence: He claimed his teacher about nor knowing anything.
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Sentence: In the first place, unquestionably the one who cand understand new innovations and use them in his life will have more power and influence the others.
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Sentence: They can not agree about respectabilty.For example, my cousin Ege who is 11 has been gone to a psychologist because of his attitude to his teacher.
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