The graph illustrates global water use by three sectors, including argricultal use, industrial use and domestic use. The table provides some information about water consumption in Brazil and Congo in the year of 2000.
As can be seen from the line graph, the three sectors all showed an upward trend in 100 years. In 1990, a large proportion of water consumpthion has been put into field of agriculre (500Km3), whereras much less water was consumpted for inductrial use and domestic use.
From 1990 to 1950, water used by agriculte went up steadily until 1950, when it began to rise significantly and reached its peak at 3000km3 in 2000. In the contrast, industrial use and domestical use remained stable in the first five decades. In 1950, they both showed a trend towards increase. By 2000, the former peaked at 1000 and the latter, boomed to 500. Although the water by domestic use still accounts for the smallest proportion of water consumption, it presented to be the most stable one.
According to the table chart, water consumption in Brazil and Congo differed a lot. The population in Brazil is 176 million, almost 30 times as much as that of Congo. The mass of land in Brazil which has been irrigated is more than 200 times than that in Congo. More irrigated island comes with greater water consumption for each person, with about 359 in Brazil and 8 in Congo respectively.
In sum, from 1900 to 2000, world saw a huge increase of water used by three sectors, water used by agriculture always played the most important role in global water consumption while domestic use remained the least significant factor. For water consumption in Brazil and Congo,it can be revealed that more water put into agriculture results in more water comsumption of each person.
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Sentence: The graph illustrates global water use by three sectors, including argricultal use, industrial use and domestic use.
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Sentence: In 1990, a large proportion of water consumpthion has been put into field of agriculre 500Km3, whereras much less water was consumpted for inductrial use and domestic use.
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Sentence: From 1990 to 1950, water used by agriculte went up steadily until 1950, when it began to rise significantly and reached its peak at 3000km3 in 2000.
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Sentence: In the contrast, industrial use and domestical use remained stable in the first five decades.
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Sentence: For water consumption in Brazil and Congo,it can be revealed that more water put into agriculture results in more water comsumption of each person.
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