You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days after purchase it has stopped working. You spoken to the company representative a week ago but the phone has still not been repaired.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
- introduce yourself
- explain the situation
- say what action you would like to company to take.
Dear sir/madam,
I am writing to you regarding mobile phone. It is not working proply.I have bought nokia 003 from your vermont branch on Thursday 23 feb.
There is no dobout about brand but I am very surprised to found out that phone is not going on silent mode as well as I am uable to change ringtones. Once I was in prayer hall and phone was in silent mode but its ringing to loudly. It was horrible situation for me because i thought my phone was in silent mode. Later, I tried to change ringtone but its not worth.Phone was hang so I have to switch off and on.
As you know i got 2 years waranty so I can replace my phone but I want another model of same brand to do that I am really appriciate your effort.
If it is possible for you to replace my phone I am greatfull beacause this phone has no sound system working. I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours faithfully,
sejal
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on Thursday 23 feb.
on Thursday, Feb. 23.
Sentence: There is no dobout about brand but I am very surprised to found out that phone is not going on silent mode as well as I am uable to change ringtones.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and found
It was horrible situation for me
It was a horrible situation for me
but its ringing to loudly.
but it's ringing loudly.
Sentence: Later, I tried to change ringtone but its not worth. Phone was hang so I have to switch off and on.
Description: A determiner, possessive is not usually followed by a negator
Suggestion: Refer to its and not
Description: The token was is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to was and hang
Sentence: It is not working proply.I have bought nokia 003 from your vermont branch on Thursday 23 feb.
Error: proply Suggestion: properly
Sentence: There is no dobout about brand but I am very surprised to found out that phone is not going on silent mode as well as I am uable to change ringtones.
Error: dobout Suggestion: bout
Error: uable Suggestion: able
Sentence: As you know i got 2 years waranty so I can replace my phone but I want another model of same brand to do that I am really appriciate your effort.
Error: appriciate Suggestion: appreciate
Error: waranty Suggestion: warranty
Sentence: If it is possible for you to replace my phone I am greatfull beacause this phone has no sound system working.
Error: greatfull Suggestion: greatly
Error: beacause Suggestion: because
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 175 200
No. of Characters: 694 1000
No. of Different Words: 105 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.637 4.0
Average Word Length: 3.966 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.164 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 41 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 25 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 12 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 7 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.909 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.482 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.416 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.756 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.195 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4