The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart compares the proportion of Australian males and females in six groups of age doing regular physical activity in the year 2010.

It is obviously seen that from the age of 25, the number of women joining in regular physical activity was higher than that of men, while much more man than woman who are above 15 years old and under the age of 24 did exercise.

About the age from 15 to 24, 52,8% of male spent their time on doing exercise, whereas women just accounted for 47,7%. However, when people reached the age of 25, we can see that the number of woman dedicating time doing phýical exercise saw an increase. Especially from 45 to 54, they came to the highest proportion with 53,3%, which was approximately 10% better than men.

But when they became older , from the age of 65, both males and females had the same amount of time for participating in regular physical activity because they no longer have to work and had much time to improve their heath.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n dedicating time doing phýical exercise saw an increase. Especially from 45 to 5...
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Line 7, column 27, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... than men. But when they became older , from the age of 65, both males and fema...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 808.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59090909091 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29237940828 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607954545455 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.6178315907 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.666666667 112.824112599 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3333333333 22.9334400587 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.23603664747 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270066493396 0.215688989381 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136446942552 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12809328262 0.0843802449381 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19119874598 0.15604864568 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12532699767 0.0819641961636 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.2329268293 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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