The bar chart shows information about people’s drinking behavior by age group in the US. Several
trends are
evident.
The highest proportion of those who never drink (nearly two-thirds) was in the 16 to 24 years
group. The proportion tended to decrease with age. Only 40 per cent of people aged 65 to 74 had
never drink.
On the other hand, the percentage of those who had quit drinking tended to increase with age. Only
5 per cent of those in the youngest age group (16 to 24) were ex-drinkers, as opposed to roughly 40
per cent of those aged 65 to 75.
The percentage of those classed as heavy drinkers also showed a distinct pattern. People in middle
age (35 to
54) tended to be the heaviest drinkers – approximately 13 per cent of the total. A relatively small
proportion of those in the youngest age group, and an even smaller percentage of those in the
oldest group (roughly 3 per cent) drink heavily.
Overall, age appears to be a significant factor in patterns of drinking behavior.
The highest proportion of those who never drink (nearly two-thirds) was in the 16 to 24 years
group. The proportion tended to decrease with age. Only 40 per cent of people aged 65 to 74 had
never drink.
On the other hand, the percentage of those who had quit drinking tended to increase with age. Only
5 per cent of those in the youngest age group (16 to 24) were ex-drinkers, as opposed to roughly 40
per cent of those aged 65 to 75.
The percentage of those classed as heavy drinkers also showed a distinct pattern. People in middle
age (35 to
54) tended to be the heaviest drinkers – approximately 13 per cent of the total. A relatively small
proportion of those in the youngest age group, and an even smaller percentage of those in the
oldest group (roughly 3 per cent) drink heavily.
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- The line chart above compares the number of old peoples who were 65 and over 65 years old from 1940 to 2040 in Japan, Sweden, and America.It is clear from the chart that the three countries all had and will have more and more 65-and-over-year-old people. 78
- The line chart above shows changes in the average money spent every+ month on children’s sports by parents from 2008 to 2010. The following graph compares the number of children taking part in three different physical activities, which are football, ath 73
- The line chart above compares the amount of old peoples who were 65 and over 65 years old from 1940 to 2040 in Japan, Sweden and America.It is clear from the chart that three countries all had and will have more and more 65-and-over-year-old people. But o 78
- The pie charts above depict the median ages of Yemeni and Italian citizens in 2000 and predictions in 2050.It is well-defined from the charts that kids, teenagers and adults under 60 years old account for most of Yemen’s population both in 2000 and 2050 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... 40 per cent of people aged 65 to 74 had never drink. On the other hand, the per...
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Suggestion: drank; drunk
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...inking tended to increase with age. Only 5 per cent of those in the youngest age ...
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...re ex-drinkers, as opposed to roughly 40 per cent of those aged 65 to 75. The pe...
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...wed a distinct pattern. People in middle age 35 to 54 tended to be the heaviest ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, third, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 658.0 965.302439024 68% => OK
No of words: 146.0 196.424390244 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50684931507 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.47606760199 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53398739882 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 75.0 106.607317073 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513698630137 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 189.9 283.868780488 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.972751791 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.25 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.23603664747 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 3.83414634146 235% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3891405697 0.215688989381 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.210687096849 0.103423049105 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.147370571412 0.0843802449381 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172148158722 0.15604864568 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135354368795 0.0819641961636 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 11.4140731707 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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