Cambridge ielts 12
The bar chart depicts the proportion of australian men and women who did regular physical activity in 2010 . The data is showed in percentage .
Overall , female doing regular physical activity more than male . At the starting of the group male doing more exercises than female .
It can be clearly seen from the bar chart that in 15 to 24 age group the proportion of men and women was 52.8 % and 47.7 % respectively . After 25 to 34 age group the female proportion was higher (48.9 % ) than male (42.2%) . Under the age of 45 , the percentage of female who doing regular physical activity was more than half and in case of male the percentage decreased by 13 % .
After reaching the age of 45 , higher proportion of females than males engaged in regular physical activity . There was a gap of over 10 percent between males and females aged from 45 to 54 ( 43.1 % and 53.3 % respectively ). This gap was less prominent from 55 to 64 years old ( 45.1 % for men and 53 % for women ) .The gender difference was minimal when it come to people aged 65 and over ( around 47 % for both males and females ) .
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...women was 52.8 % and 47.7 % respectively . After 25 to 34 age group the female pro...
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...een males and females aged from 45 to 54 43.1 % and 53.3 % respectively . This ga...
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...e gender difference was minimal when it come to people aged 65 and over around 47 %...
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... around 47 % for both males and females .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 880.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58333333333 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45075527439 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510416666667 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 264.6 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3126832889 43.030603864 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.2 5.23603664747 4% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 1.69756097561 1649% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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