The chart below describes results of public opinion poll, where people were asked to name the most important place smoking should be banned from.
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This pie chart presents the places where people thought smoking should be banned in. Overall, work places, restaurants and shopping malls where the highest 3 places that people thought smoking should be prohibited in with percentages of 21, 19 and 18 respectively.
Next comes beaches and public transport showing 13% and 11% respectively for people that think smoking should not be aloud in these places. However regarding bus stops and teachers lounges the percentages where much lower compared with the other places; 8% said that smoking in bus stops should be banned and 7% in teachers lounges. Lastly, very few people show that smoking should be banned in pubs.
To sum up, the results show that the places people think smoking should be prohibited in are the most public places for example in shopping malls because all age groups are found there where in pubs the majority of the people there are willing to harm themselves.
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However regarding bus stops and teachers lounges the percentages where much lower compared with the other places
However regarding bus stops and teachers lounges the percentages are much lower compared with the other places
Sentence: However regarding bus stops and teachers lounges the percentages where much lower compared with the other places; 8 said that smoking in bus stops should be banned and 7 in teachers lounges.
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Suggestion: Refer to teachers and lounges
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