The chart below showd the annual number of rentals and sales of films from particular store between 2002 and 2011.

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The chart below showd the annual number of rentals and sales of films from particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The bar chart shows the information about yearly number of rental as well as sales of films by particular store between 2002 and 2011.The data is celebrated in thousands and years which is clearly and coherently.

It is crystal clear that, during 2002 the sales of Rentals,VHS and DVD were 185000,85000and 45000 respectively.whereas Blue ray had not sold .After that year, the sale of Rentals and VHS were decline and DVD sales were
rising.furthermore,the sales of Rentals were 120000 and Blue ray sales vanished in 2007.But, DVD sales increased to 210000.

Apart from this, when 2011 started Rentals reduced to 65000.Also,VHS sales had sold about zero.DVD sales decreased to 180000 whereas sell of Blue ray were increasing upto 5000 as compared to 2010.

Overall, it is clear that DVD sales had increased as compared to Rentals and Blue ray films was starting sale between 2002 and 2011.VHS sales vanished durong some years.

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...n 2011 started Rentals reduced to 65000.Also,VHS sales had sold about zero.DVD sales...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, well, whereas, apart from, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 785.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16447368421 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09307795451 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559210526316 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 204.3 283.868780488 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.4926829268 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.3813772492 43.030603864 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 196.25 112.824112599 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0 22.9334400587 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.25 5.23603664747 310% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321532213972 0.215688989381 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.226656119219 0.103423049105 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0942228306794 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202246955113 0.15604864568 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0967084626331 0.0819641961636 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.9 13.2329268293 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.29 61.2550243902 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.06136585366 110% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.9970731707 156% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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