The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make co

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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below the graph comparison of five major companies brands sales cell phone between these years 2009 to 2013.

In the graph describe a most famous mobile five brand like Samsun, Apple and Nokia other LG and ZTE. Firstly talk about Samsung in the graph second highest sale market compare to Nokia. Nokia mobile phone company was the best before 2010.That time Nokia provide best feature in the mobile phone. In 2013 tough competition between two companies like Samsung and Nokia. Nokia is well better in between 2009 to 2012.After 2012 Samsung market is amazing change in cell phone and provide world best feature. So, In 2013 Samsung is the make world best sales mobile brand.

Therefore, LG companies is third number sales brand in 2009 also in 2011,Affter that in 20013 Apple is much better than LG and ZTE. Apple mobile sales ratio is better in 2013 around 150 plus purchasers active. Apple less effective than Samsung and Nokia. Last is ZTE is more efficient in 2009 compare to Apple. His market ratio is near 50 in 2009 and Apple is sales ratio less 25 percent.

Conclusion is Samsun sales ration better by year and second competitor is Nokia. Nokia is best sales market before 2013 after that his sales ration is less every year. Apple mobile is much better than LG and ZTE.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'brand' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'brands'.
Suggestion: brands
...raph describe a most famous mobile five brand like Samsun, Apple and Nokia other LG a...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
... phone company was the best before 2010.That time Nokia provide best feature in the ...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
... is well better in between 2009 to 2012.After 2012 Samsung market is amazing change i...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ZTE is more efficient in 2009 compare to Apple. His market ratio is near 50 in 2...
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Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...9 compare to Apple. His market ratio is near 50 in 2009 and Apple is sales ratio...
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Line 7, column 49, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on is Samsun sales ration better by year and second competitor is Nokia. Nokia is...
^^
Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
... and second competitor is Nokia. Nokia is best sales market before 2013 after that his...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, second, so, therefore, third, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1075.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 224.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79910714286 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.05391592607 2.65546596893 77% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464285714286 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 313.2 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.955931114 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6666666667 112.824112599 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9333333333 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180556276649 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748499787915 0.103423049105 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607399168884 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138653870411 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698485374004 0.0819641961636 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.2329268293 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.06136585366 82% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'brand' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'brands'.
Suggestion: brands
...raph describe a most famous mobile five brand like Samsun, Apple and Nokia other LG a...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
... phone company was the best before 2010.That time Nokia provide best feature in the ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
... is well better in between 2009 to 2012.After 2012 Samsung market is amazing change i...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ZTE is more efficient in 2009 compare to Apple. His market ratio is near 50 in 2...
^^
Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...9 compare to Apple. His market ratio is near 50 in 2009 and Apple is sales ratio...
^^
Line 7, column 49, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on is Samsun sales ration better by year and second competitor is Nokia. Nokia is...
^^
Line 7, column 89, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
... and second competitor is Nokia. Nokia is best sales market before 2013 after that his...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, second, so, therefore, third, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1075.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 224.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79910714286 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.05391592607 2.65546596893 77% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464285714286 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 313.2 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.955931114 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.6666666667 112.824112599 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9333333333 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73333333333 5.23603664747 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180556276649 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748499787915 0.103423049105 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607399168884 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138653870411 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698485374004 0.0819641961636 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.2329268293 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.59 8.06136585366 82% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.