The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in Town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

The four pie charts compare the proportion of people working in divergent positions( manufacturing, sales and service) in towns A and B between 1960 and 2010.
It can be seen that the percentage of service workers experienced a significant increase, surpassing manufacturing to become the most common in 2010, whereas, in town B, services increased slightly. Both proportions of manufacturing workers in towns A and B decrease significantly. There is a slight decrease in sales positions in town A while the corresponding figure in town B increased slightly.
In 1960, manufacturing accounted for the most percentage with 41%. The percentage of people working in sales was relatively the same as that in service, at 29% and 30% respectively. Meanwhile, in town B, people working in manufacturing were by far the most prevalent sector (70%). The proportion of sales workers was 20% which was double higher than that of services.
In 2010, the figure for the service sector in town A increased significantly to 61%, accounted more than half of the total. Manufacturing made up 20% of the proportion of people working in town A which was 2 times lower than that of town B. The figure for sale worker in town A and town B was 16% and 22% respectively.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d town B was 16% and 22% respectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1039.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94761904762 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1887308659 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461904761905 0.547539520022 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 308.7 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5085747881 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4545454545 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 22.9334400587 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.63636363636 5.23603664747 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27495600262 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121826691467 0.103423049105 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684116238235 0.0843802449381 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195481246036 0.15604864568 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0504874108624 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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