The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University s social media advertising campaign organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university

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The charts below show the total number of applicants the year before and the year after Doolittle University’s social media advertising campaign, organized by age range and how close the applicants live to the university.

the two bar-charts illustrate how the social media ad campaign has affected the demographic of the applicants applying to Doolittle University.Moreover,these applicants data are split into according to whether they live within the 100km of the university or not.
According to the chart for applicants living within the 100km raidus, it attracted aged adults more than the younger public whoose age ranged from 18-29.Even though applicants whoose age crosses the 40 mark are less in quantity compared to the younger ones,it's count doubled after the Ad campaign to approximately 50 applications.
Surpisingly,the graph containing students living further than the 100km radius follows an opposite pattern compared to the previous graph.It shows that younger applicants ,specifically in the age group of 18-22 increased dramatically after the campaign, almost more than double the previous amount.Furthermore, applicants in the age group of 23-39 had decreased after the campaign by a negeligble amount and on the other hand older applicants increased

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 898.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71974522293 4.92477711251 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.47399535958 2.65546596893 131% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624203821656 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 22.4926829268 231% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.6044952065 43.030603864 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 299.333333333 112.824112599 265% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.3333333333 22.9334400587 228% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.0 5.23603664747 306% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307266917595 0.215688989381 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.209411329613 0.103423049105 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474928140405 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209411329613 0.15604864568 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474928140405 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.7 13.2329268293 240% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 10.24 61.2550243902 17% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.8 10.3012195122 241% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.78 11.4140731707 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.94 8.06136585366 136% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.9970731707 207% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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