The diagram shows production of sugar by a german company for supermarkets and restaurants

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The diagram shows production of sugar by a german company for supermarkets and restaurants

The diagram is a clear depiction of sugar manufacture for restaurants and supermarkets by a German company.

Overall, the process involves eight steps which is started with the harvest of the raw material, and culminating in delivery.

In the beginning of procedure, sugar is produced by harvesting sugarcane from tropical regions. After that juice is collected from those sugarcanes using a crusher, and then juice is partially filtered to gather raw sugar which is shipped to Germany for the subsequent processing . When the raw sugar reaches Germany, they pass through melting and filtering stage where the complete purrication is done.

The melted sugar is now called sugar syrup which transforms into crystals.

In the following stage, the sugar crystals are dried using fans which the newly made sugar is packed.

Finally, sugar packs are delivered to different supermarkets and restaurants

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...g a crusher, and then juice is partially filtered to gather raw sugar which is sh...
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...to Germany for the subsequent processing . When the raw sugar reaches Germany, the...
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...wing stage, the sugar crystals are dried using fans which the newly made sugar is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 33.7804878049 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 772.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 140.0 196.424390244 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51428571429 4.92477711251 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43979062825 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80954920263 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.635714285714 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 233.1 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2932050124 43.030603864 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.125 5.23603664747 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273423760575 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136604795893 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140054121208 0.0843802449381 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167842604017 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14993262089 0.0819641961636 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.38 11.4140731707 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.06136585366 121% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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