The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by ThaoLyBui on Mon, 10/01/2018 - 01:06

The given diagram illustrates the life cycle of a spices of large fish called the salmon, from "fry" to "adult salmon" stage.

It is seem that the whole life of every single salmon includes three basic steps. At each stage, they have different names, namely "fry", "smolt" and "adult salmon". Beside, these fishes also grow in a range of suitable environment in their life cycle.

Firstly step, salmon eggs are in the bottom of river (slow moving-to be precise) hidden between small stones and reeds approximate 5-6 months. After that, they break the eggs and become a small fish. Next, because of moving ability, these salmon will change the habitat. The river fast flowing is required, namely lower river. They live there almost 4 years. Move to the second step, "smolt" is a salmon about 12-15 cm, which will swim to the open sea. The fishes stays here 5 years. Finally, "adult salmon" has a huge size ever, 70 - 76 cm. The long journey is begun when salmon swim from ocean and back to the upper river. The new generation will be born again and again.

As long as, the salmon life cycle still maintains, new generation will always be born and grow like the diagram.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a spice' or simply 'spices'?
Suggestion: a spice; spices
...n diagram illustrates the life cycle of a spices of large fish called the salmon, from &...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os; to 'adult salmon' stage. It is seem that the whole life of every ...
^^^
Line 3, column 7, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'seemed'.
Suggestion: seemed
...pos;adult salmon' stage. It is seem that the whole life of every single sal...
^^^^
Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'stay'.
Suggestion: stay
...h will swim to the open sea. The fishes stays here 5 years. Finally, 'adult sal...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, second, so, still

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1041.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05339805825 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82303398414 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 106.607317073 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650485436893 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 310.5 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5243231489 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.4 112.824112599 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7333333333 22.9334400587 60% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.46666666667 5.23603664747 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.09268292683 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136076219493 0.215688989381 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498946286532 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049492245891 0.0843802449381 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112874347657 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496918440394 0.0819641961636 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 61.2550243902 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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