The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where releva

Submitted by Arwinder on Sat, 10/27/2018 - 11:51

The tow diagrams demonstrate the procedure of producing cement and concrete with specific machines and ingredients.

Overall, the first process of cement production basically has main four stages and two ingredients, whereas in making of concrete method it has only a step but raw material is measured in percentage.

First of all, the stuff of cement production is limestone and clay which are added through the either side of slide that help to add both material into crusher at the same time. After, it is changed in powdered form. Then, this powder is putted into cylindrical mixer which is further attached with rotating heater. Afterwards, the mixed powder go to heater via the pipe. later after the heating process it is again pulverized by grinder. Eventually, the ready cement mixture packed into the bags.

However, in the technique of concrete procedure there are total four ingredients are required with proper measuring. The cement in needed (15%),water (10%), sand a quarter and gravel (small granules of stone) are exactly a half. Simultaneously, all natural stuff are added into giant concrete mixer. Mixer is rotating as clock wise after mixing it will be ready.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...material into crusher at the same time. After, it is changed in powdered form. Then, ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Later
...mixed powder go to heater via the pipe. later after the heating process it is again p...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, then, whereas, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 993.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.171875 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6488202874 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640625 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6383219921 43.030603864 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.75 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 22.9334400587 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.23603664747 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152180721591 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493991828304 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580791855759 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111462740029 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058548735002 0.0819641961636 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 40.7170731707 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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