Nowadays, a TV set is almost in every house, and there are many families that have more than one TV. Even though people enjoy all kinds of programs on television , they also see a diversity of advertisements. Some of those commercials are directed towards young children under the age of five. Advertisements that target young children should be prohibited. I strongly believe that television should banned advertisements which target young children for two reasons.
First of all, the brains of child is far from being mature at the age from two to five years old. Consequently, the information they receive from advertisements are not processed correctly. Moreover, at that age many kids assume that advertisements which being showed in TV are correct, so they start to imitate what they have seen on TV. For example, one day my nephew saw an advertisement on the television showed that by wearing a certain jacket he would be able to fly. A day later when his parents were in the garden, they noticed their son who was about to jump luckily his father were able to catch him before hitting the ground.
The second reason is that children are easily enticed to colorful items on media, as a result they would want to have it. When children see things they like, they ask their parents to buy it. For instance, my friend has a lovely girl who is only three years old who always wants her father to buy everything that being shown on television whether it is good or bad , and if they did not purchased it for her she will keep yelling without stopping for an hour and will disobey her father , so he always complains about this issues and the amount of money he has to spend to satisfy his daughter. Eventually, children will make this become their habit and patents will have problems neutering their children.
In conclusion, the variety of advertisements harm children and make parents illustrated, also parents should keep an eye on their kids to avoid unexpected accidents from happening. I think broadcasting companies should put an end to advertisements that target children under the age of five.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, as to, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 7.0 257% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 1.00243902439 998% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 3.15609756098 507% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 5.60731707317 803% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 33.7804878049 136% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 965.302439024 182% => OK
No of words: 362.0 196.424390244 184% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85082872928 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 3.73543355544 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73298623051 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 106.607317073 186% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546961325967 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 283.868780488 187% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.6742042264 43.030603864 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.23603664747 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 1.69756097561 1119% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199591196668 0.215688989381 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856756946272 0.103423049105 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786953486226 0.0843802449381 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13960292093 0.15604864568 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745149943727 0.0819641961636 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 61.2550243902 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 40.7170731707 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.