the first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children s sports between 2008 and 2014 The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period

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the first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children's sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period

Submitted by ttnd on Tue, 08/17/2021 - 23:31

the line graph gives information about the average monthly amount that parents in British spent on their children's sports and the number of children who took part in three different sports from 2008 to 2014

it is clear that more parents spend the amount on each year for their children's sport over the period of 6 years. In terms of joining activities, football is more popular than Athletics and swimming

In 2008, people in British spent about 20 pounds a month on their children to play sport, and these figures increase gradually over as a whole time. By the year 2014, the amount of money spent on sport jump over 30 pounds for a month.

Looking into the number of children who play sports. In 2008, there were about 8 Million children who enjoy playing football, while there 2 Million children were enrolled in the swimming club and nearly 1 Million who doing athletics. The figures for playing football remained relatively stable in the last whole years, while the number of children who went swimming had more than doubled, to nearly 4 million, and there was a fivefold increase in practising athletics.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 932.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85416666667 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33721310628 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.8716258547 43.030603864 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 155.333333333 112.824112599 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 22.9334400587 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.23603664747 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391099081852 0.215688989381 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199881578778 0.103423049105 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123071947695 0.0843802449381 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263622860098 0.15604864568 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123308976037 0.0819641961636 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.2329268293 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.38 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 40.7170731707 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.4329268293 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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