The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The given charts show us the consumption of energy in an Australian family, and the consequence of this energy use.
As can be seen from the first chart, the proportion of the heating is the major source of energy usage, accounting for 42%, the largest percentage compared with others. Following that, the proportion of energy domestic needs of water heating, refrigeration, lighting, other applications is 30%, 7%, 4%, 20%, and 15% respectively. The smallest proportion of energy use is 2%, belong to cooling.
Moving to the second chart, inspire of the largest usage of heating, it is the only one which has the greenhouse gas emission is lower than energy use, about 15 percentages. In the contrast, water heating is the main reason causes greenhouse gas emission. Proportion of water heating, cooling is 32%, 3% respectively. Especially, refrigeration, lighting, other applications is double increase 14%, 8%, and 28% respectively.
To summarize, heating is the major source of domestic needs, causes 15 percentage of greenhouse gas emission. water heating is the main reason of greenhouse gas emission.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'so']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233333333333 0.268076937826 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.166666666667 0.116061578633 144% => OK
Adjectives: 0.1 0.0759168565197 132% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0 0.0366838410393 0% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0333333333333 0.0131127313244 254% => OK
Prepositions: 0.166666666667 0.155750635184 107% => OK
Participles: 0.0666666666667 0.0379272487307 176% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.37332110369 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0 0.0210936926555 0% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.2 0.0948980150116 211% => Less determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0333333333333 0.00437022459523 763% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.00967000014798 0% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 148.0 1161.00487805 13% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 28.0 196.9 14% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28571428571 5.90752243213 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 2.30032663379 3.73763899035 62% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.285714285714 0.337110787985 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.142857142857 0.247514529752 58% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0714285714286 0.171178102325 42% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0714285714286 0.112407865282 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37332110369 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 23.0 106.607317073 22% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.821428571429 0.546246751206 150% => OK
Word variations: 58.0965708516 49.3433353143 118% => OK
How many sentences: 2.0 8.93414634146 22% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0094962315 61% => OK
Sentence length SD: 2.0 42.9750493124 5% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.0 135.714022679 55% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 23.0094962315 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.689975730869 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.84146341463 52% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.48048780488 135% => OK
Readability: 28.2857142857 47.7609492067 59% => OK
Elegance: 2.33333333333 2.94281807926 79% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40731654308 0.418131533498 97% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.249778741716 0.181151798455 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0 0.0850326197045 0% => Sentences are so close to each other.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 1.0 0.706616315825 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 3.51083346858e-16 0.157042692854 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.311637970064 0.228904883108 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0159589611098 0.108899403657 15% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.249778741716 0.367819155151 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0 0.0812612215331 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.311637970064 0.316326947829 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159589611098 0.0921553760075 17% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70731707317 27% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.08536585366 24% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 3.16585365854 32% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.02926829268 33% => OK
Total topic words: 2.0 7.1512195122 28% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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