The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK per week from 1970 to 1990

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The given graph shows the consumption of fast food in the UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990.

The line graph below depicts the weekly consumption of 3 different fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
Overall, for both fish and chips, hamburgers increased steadily over the period shown. Meanwhile, pizza was the opposite, this food declined minimally.
As can be seen from the graph, in 1970 the consumption of fish and chips just only approximately 100 grams per week. But for some reason, fish and chips silently rose gradually with over 50 grams in 1980. While the sun shines fish and chips have not remained decrease during the 30 years. The amount of consumption of hamburgers has the same as fish and chips. It has also a great change on the line graph. Although hamburger even has a point of departure quieter than fish and chips at 4 to 5 grams per week. Over time, this fast food was interesting by the British people. In 1990 the proportion of British people who ate hamburgers was over 250 grams every week.
Last, pizza was the most popular fast food in 1970 with the highest figure grams in the graph-over 300 grams. From this year onwards, the amount of pizza witnessed a dropped gradually. At first, the proportion who ate pizza was not too much. Over time, this number was not still improve but also continued to fall. And the most dramatic change is pizza was the lowest junk food in the line graph with 210 grams in 1999. In the end, fish and chips reached a peak of 500 grams in 1999.

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'graphs'.
Suggestion: graphs
The line graph below depicts the weekly consumption of...
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Line 1, column 92, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of 3 different fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990. Overall, for both fish a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1158.0 965.302439024 120% => OK
No of words: 256.0 196.424390244 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5234375 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29979618662 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 106.607317073 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51953125 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 324.0 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 8.94146341463 190% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.9849424286 43.030603864 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.1176470588 112.824112599 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0588235294 22.9334400587 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23529411765 5.23603664747 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273209615257 0.215688989381 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956014507078 0.103423049105 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137632048031 0.0843802449381 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23189585585 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.20345843059 0.0819641961636 248% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 13.2329268293 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 61.2550243902 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.34 11.4140731707 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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