The graph and table below show the everage monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities

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The graph and table below show the everage monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

Submitted by Makhliyo on Tue, 12/15/2020 - 11:16

Consequently, with the Graph and Table, we will describe the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three large cities. Summarizing the information, choosing and reporting the main characteristics, and, if necessary, make comparisons.
In the graph and we can understand that Sydney in January and December had a high temperature, but in the middle of June, July and in August it decreased. In New York it was 5 powers, but in the between of the year it enlarged to thirteen, and in London it was 9 degrees, closer to March it increased slightly, but in August it began to decline until December again dropped to 5-10 degrees
In the total sunshine, New York is gaining the most with 2.535 hours. Sydney is 62 times less than New York, that is, 2,473 hours of sunshine, while London has about 1,180 hours of sunshine.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , New
...sunshine per year in three cities-London,New York and Sydney. Overall,the temperatu...
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Line 2, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ies-London,New York and Sydney. Overall,the temperature pattern in Sydney was diffe...
^^^^
Line 2, column 57, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...erature pattern in Sydney was different than that of London and New York. Sydney had...
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Line 2, column 175, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: New
...inning of the year which was above 25°C.New York experienced the lowest temperature...
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Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: At
... lowest temperature which was below 5°C.At that time,the temperature in London was...
^^
Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...erature which was below 5°C.At that time,the temperature in London was slightly high...
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Line 2, column 327, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
...tly higher than in New York around 10°C.After that,New York hit the peak point of bel...
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Line 2, column 337, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , New
... than in New York around 10°C.After that,New York hit the peak point of below 30°C.L...
^^^^
Line 2, column 380, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: London
...w York hit the peak point of below 30°C.London experienced the same trend during this ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 433, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Sydney
...enced the same trend during this period.Sydney experienced an increasing trend for tem...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , New
...of 25°C in December. Based on the table,New York had the highest annual sunshine wh...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 778.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 142.0 196.424390244 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47887323944 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45201032557 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97306562699 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570422535211 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.4926829268 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.848653166 43.030603864 365% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 194.5 112.824112599 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 22.9334400587 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0243267174721 0.215688989381 11% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0215364393849 0.103423049105 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.019324772298 0.0843802449381 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0146211884764 0.15604864568 9% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0107111630834 0.0819641961636 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.1 13.2329268293 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 61.2550243902 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.3012195122 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.1 11.4140731707 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.4329268293 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.9970731707 145% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 133, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , New
...sunshine per year in three cities-London,New York and Sydney. Overall,the temperatu...
^^^^
Line 2, column 8, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ies-London,New York and Sydney. Overall,the temperature pattern in Sydney was diffe...
^^^^
Line 2, column 57, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...erature pattern in Sydney was different than that of London and New York. Sydney had...
^^^^
Line 2, column 175, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: New
...inning of the year which was above 25°C.New York experienced the lowest temperature...
^^^
Line 2, column 239, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: At
... lowest temperature which was below 5°C.At that time,the temperature in London was...
^^
Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...erature which was below 5°C.At that time,the temperature in London was slightly high...
^^^^
Line 2, column 327, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
...tly higher than in New York around 10°C.After that,New York hit the peak point of bel...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 337, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , New
... than in New York around 10°C.After that,New York hit the peak point of below 30°C.L...
^^^^
Line 2, column 380, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: London
...w York hit the peak point of below 30°C.London experienced the same trend during this ...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 433, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Sydney
...enced the same trend during this period.Sydney experienced an increasing trend for tem...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , New
...of 25°C in December. Based on the table,New York had the highest annual sunshine wh...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 778.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 142.0 196.424390244 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47887323944 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45201032557 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97306562699 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 81.0 106.607317073 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570422535211 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.4926829268 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.848653166 43.030603864 365% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 194.5 112.824112599 172% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 22.9334400587 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0243267174721 0.215688989381 11% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0215364393849 0.103423049105 21% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.019324772298 0.0843802449381 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0146211884764 0.15604864568 9% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0107111630834 0.0819641961636 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.1 13.2329268293 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 61.2550243902 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.51609756098 200% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 10.3012195122 164% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.1 11.4140731707 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.4329268293 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.9970731707 145% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.