The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

This is a line graph, which demonstrates number of visits to two selected music sites during selected days under review. Frequent fluctuations are observed from day one to fifteen in number of viewers of both the sites.

Nearly, 120,000 viewers have visited Music Choice during day one, whereas only one fourth of visitors visited Pop Parade on the same day. Further to that, the highest number of 170,000 visitors have been recorded in day fifteen for Music Choice. On contrast, only 70,000 was recorded for Pop Parade on the mentioned day.

Moreover, the gap between numbers of visitors viewed both the sites narrowed from day seven to nine and the gap remained at 10,000 level throughout the days. However, more viewers visited Pop Parade website from day twelve to thirteen and the growth percentage slowed down beyond that point.

In summary, frequent fluctuations are observed in numbers of viewers visited selected website during selected days. On the other hand, generally Music Choice site had attracted more visitors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 139, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...ors visited Pop Parade on the same day. Further to that, the highest number of 170,000 ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['however', 'if', 'moreover', 'whereas', 'in summary', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.302702702703 0.268076937826 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.172972972973 0.116061578633 149% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0432432432432 0.0759168565197 57% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0432432432432 0.0366838410393 118% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0 0.0131127313244 0% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.151351351351 0.155750635184 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0756756756757 0.0379272487307 200% => Less participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.35709190476 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.027027027027 0.0210936926555 128% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0864864864865 0.0948980150116 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00540540540541 0.00967000014798 56% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1035.0 1161.00487805 89% => OK
No of words: 167.0 196.9 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.19760479042 5.90752243213 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.73763899035 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.449101796407 0.337110787985 133% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.311377245509 0.247514529752 126% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.173652694611 0.171178102325 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0658682634731 0.112407865282 59% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35709190476 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.562874251497 0.546246751206 103% => OK
Word variations: 48.0920142223 49.3433353143 97% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 8.93414634146 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.5555555556 23.0094962315 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.9120068456 42.9750493124 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 135.714022679 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 23.0094962315 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.689975730869 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.48048780488 68% => OK
Readability: 49.6932801065 47.7609492067 104% => OK
Elegance: 2.45 2.94281807926 83% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331834623966 0.418131533498 79% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.154043510625 0.181151798455 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0783849495731 0.0850326197045 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.663082523908 0.706616315825 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0881867035857 0.157042692854 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163823929491 0.228904883108 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756415563054 0.108899403657 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.222075032104 0.367819155151 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0539383314858 0.0812612215331 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219790625092 0.316326947829 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628454191727 0.0921553760075 68% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70731707317 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.08536585366 98% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.16585365854 158% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.02926829268 132% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 7.1512195122 126% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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