The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.You should wr

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The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

Summarise the information by choosing and describe the main idea, and make comparisons where appropriate.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart illustrates how many percentage of people working across 6 countries in the year of 1995 and 2005.

Overall, Switzerland were a country that was not different too much in the rate of male and female employees both years, comparing to the percentage between male and female in Australia which had a large difference.

A glance to the graph provided reveals something that Iceland topped the list, with the highest percentage of male employees in both years (over 70%), but they were only the third highest rate of females in 1995 and 2005, which were over 10% slower than that of Switzerland. By contrast, Switzerland held the second rank in the rate of males at the moment. Not surprisingly, a bottom position belonged to Australia, which the lowest percentage, including males and females in both years. Although they had an upward trend the rate of male and female employees, especially the percentage of male in 2005 which was slightly lower a little bit than that of the third rank, at nearly 70%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun percentage seems to be countable; consider using: 'many percentages'.
Suggestion: many percentages
The bar chart illustrates how many percentage of people working across 6 countries in...
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Line 5, column 629, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...male in 2005 which was slightly lower a little bit than that of the third rank, at nearly ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 848.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 174.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87356321839 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63281124884 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557471264368 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7740239169 43.030603864 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.333333333 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.23603664747 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0706796421113 0.215688989381 33% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421555985943 0.103423049105 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317579637581 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0621859926131 0.15604864568 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02987374289 0.0819641961636 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 10.3012195122 118% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.56 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.4329268293 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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