The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The three-line graph indicates the percentages of elderly people in one Asian country and two western countries namely Japan, and Sweden and USA respectively over 100 years period

Overall, the proportion of elderly people in the three countries is all under 10% and the USA had the greatest percentage of elder people with about 8% to 9%. As can be seen from the graph, the proportion in the elderly of three countries had increase from 1940 to 2014 and is thought to increase till 2040.

From the beginning of the survey to 1990, the elderly percentage of the three countries fluctuated. In particular, the two western countries had the same increased patterns around 14% in 1990 while the other had increased and just under 5% in 1990.

Since 1990, the elderly proportion in Sweden and Japan had risen where as that of the USA seem keep in stable. In 2014, Sweden has the largest proportion of the elderly among the three countries about 20% while Japan has the smallest with about 10%.

From now to 2030, the percentage of elderly people in Japan and USA are expected to rise whereas this percentage in Sweden is supposed to decrease from 20% to 18%.

In the last ten years of the period, the elderly people percentages in the three countries are forecast to grow. This proportion of Japan will have a dramatic increase from 10% to about 27% while Sweden and USA is thought to have about 25% and 23% respectively.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
whereas, while, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 33.7804878049 163% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1179.0 965.302439024 122% => OK
No of words: 249.0 196.424390244 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73493975904 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50353212523 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429718875502 0.547539520022 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 341.1 283.868780488 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.0622445692 43.030603864 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0 112.824112599 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6666666667 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103450512833 0.215688989381 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054267059179 0.103423049105 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493111868022 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0631101840189 0.15604864568 40% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481593767584 0.0819641961636 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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