The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Zorapower on Wed, 07/04/2018 - 12:23

The linear graph illustrate the percentage of senior citizens, those are older than 65 years. Over a century in three different countries manly as Japan, Sweden and USA and also give projection till 2040.

Overall, it predicted that the maximum proportion of population 65 and above will be Japan in 2040 and minimum will be in USA in the same time period.

After carefull analysis, it is lucid that the population of grey people in USA those are older than 65 years was nearly 10 percent in 1940 and this percentage increased slightly to 15 percentage in 1980 and it remained constant till 2017. After that it is produced that population will be increased sharply to more then 20 percent in 2040. In case of Sweden, the population was more then 5 percent in 1940 and it boosted up in 2 decades near about the 15 percent. After that, fluctuations were noticed from 1980 to 2018 and it is projected that it will be reached 25 percent in 2040.

Probing ahead, the population of Japan was 5 percent in 1940, then it declined slightly from 1960 to 2000 the percentage was stable and it inclined slightly till 2017. It is estimated that population will be increased rapidly tk more over the 25 percent in 2040.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...980 and it remained constant till 2017. After that it is produced that population wil...
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Line 5, column 316, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ation will be increased sharply to more then 20 percent in 2040. In case of Sweden, ...
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Line 5, column 384, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[2]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...case of Sweden, the population was more then 5 percent in 1940 and it boosted up in ...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 5.60731707317 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1000.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 215.0 196.424390244 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6511627907 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53697801261 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488372093023 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1008944228 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.111111111 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 5.23603664747 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14215792908 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703218182486 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0287603674778 0.0843802449381 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101529192916 0.15604864568 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236142839589 0.0819641961636 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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