The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in the three different countries.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in the three different countries.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the rate of the ageing population, those are 65 years old and over in Japan, USA and Sweden in the period from 1940 to 2040.

At the beginning in 1940, the proportion of people having a long lifespan in USA was at the highest place, nearly 10%, while in Sweden and Japan was about 7% and 5% respectively. From 1940 to 1980, Japan experienced a gradual fall in the percentage of the old aged 65 and over, about 3%, in contrast, the trend in USA and Sweden had a tendency to increase steadily.

In the period from 1980 to 2018, there was an downward trend in the proportion of people between the age 65 and over in USA, from 15% down to 14% while in Sweden, the proportion increased considerably and it climbed rapidly in Japan, about 7% in 38 years. In the next 22 years, the percentage of population aged in the range from 65 to above in all three nations is expected to improve sharply, especially in Japan, a remarkable recovery is forecasted, which probably leads to the highest place in 2040.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 44, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...the period from 1980 to 2018, there was an downward trend in the proportion of peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 838.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48128342246 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59168021063 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51871657754 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 3.36585365854 238% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.9552142171 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.6 112.824112599 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.4 22.9334400587 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177036841679 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109660206424 0.103423049105 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427699016879 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140737361075 0.15604864568 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364841043371 0.0819641961636 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 13.2329268293 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.3 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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