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The chart provides information about the number of students and the portion of male qualifiers achieving English training certifications in two periods 2007/8 and 2008/9 in the United Kingdom.
Overall, the total students sit and qualified in both qualifications remained almost the same throughout the period in the UK. However, male certificates holder showed a clear decreasing trend in all categories.
Observing the data from TEFL, in 2007/8, the total number of test-taker was over 25000, while over 18000 attendances were female, the opposite sexed peers accounted for just 26.9%. In 2008/9, the total number remained around 25000 qualifiers. In addition, the number of both qualified male and female students stayed unchanged, despite 0.7% drop in men’s portion in 2008/9.
Turning to Cambridge UCLES CELTA and other degrees, in the UK, its total qualified attendance were significantly less than TEFL’s in the given period, with approximately 8000 students. However, the number of its qualifiers experienced slight increase throughout the given period, although qualified men’s proportion dropped from 17.3% to 12.1%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 143, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'certificates'' or 'certificate's'?
Suggestion: certificates'; certificate's
...out the period in the UK. However, male certificates holder showed a clear decreasing trend ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 970.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 170.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70588235294 4.92477711251 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85618372433 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629411764706 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4113146694 43.030603864 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.25 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 11.4140731707 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.06136585366 116% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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