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The line graph gives data about the number of users of 5 different services of communication worldwide from 1998 to 2008.

Overall, cell phone and Internet services became more and more popular, and the others similarly experienced minimal growth over the years.

In 1998, the figures for cell phone and Internet users started at around 5 per 100 inhabitants. They both increased over the remaining years, with cell phone service gaining the higher position in 2008, at more than 60 users per 100 in habitants. This number was approximately three times as much as that of Internet service in the same year.

Meanwhile, throughout this 10-year period, little change was seen in the use of landline service, with about 15 users per 100 inhabitants. Also, mobile and fixed broadband had yet to be introduced by 2002. The figures for these two services rose slightly to roughly 5 users per 100 inhabitants in the last year.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, similarly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 774.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9935483871 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60509386546 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612903225806 0.547539520022 112% => OK
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.5797737951 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.75 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.23603664747 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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