IELTS 10 Test 1 Writing Task 1 Academic

Given pie charts show the consumption of energy and greenhouse emissions in daily life’s of Australian people

Firstly , the first pie chart illustrates as the energy uses by people in Australia in there day to day life However, There are six thing which required energy supply from which these two thinks lead the chart by there uses one is heating and the other is water-heating which total have 72% of supply where heating is 42% and water heating is 30% and the others which have less than20% dominance is cooling,lighting,other application and refrigerator which is about 2%,4%,15%,7%

however , below pie chart show percentage of consumption of greenhouse gas emissions where water -heating have 32% and the other -application have 28%
Which seem to be higher as compared to energy use and the other one which also have double it percentages in this chart is refrigeration and the one which get decline in percentage is heating in this diagram which is about 15% and the other are
Cooling ,lighting which is 3%,8%

Overall ,there is rise and fall in the percentage of energy use and greenhouse gas emissions in Australian households

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Average: 6.2 (5 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...irst pie chart illustrates as the energy uses by people in Australia in there day...
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...there day to day life However, There are six thing which required energy supply ...
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...nergy supply from which these two thinks lead the chart by there uses one is hea...
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...two thinks lead the chart by there uses one is heating and the other is water-h...
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...there uses one is heating and the other is water-heating which total have 72% of...
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...r which is about 2%,4%,15%,7% however , below pie chart show percentage of c...
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...5%,7% however , below pie chart show percentage of consumption of greenhouse...
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...r , below pie chart show percentage of consumption of greenhouse gas emissions ...
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... emissions where water -heating have 32% and the other -application have 28% W...
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...sions where water -heating have 32% and the other -application have 28% Which ...
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...2% and the other -application have 28% Which seem to be higher as compared to e...
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...m to be higher as compared to energy use and the other one which also have doubl...
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...y use and the other one which also have double it percentages in this chart is ...
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...use and the other one which also have double it percentages in this chart is refrig...
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... double it percentages in this chart is refrigeration and the one which get dec...
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...centages in this chart is refrigeration and the one which get decline in percent...
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...ram which is about 15% and the other are Cooling ,lighting which is 3%,8% Ove...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06315789474 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97994963487 2.65546596893 112% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489473684211 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 288.9 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 8.94146341463 11% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 190.0 22.4926829268 845% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 43.030603864 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 962.0 112.824112599 853% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 190.0 22.9334400587 828% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 37.0 5.23603664747 707% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 31.0 1.69756097561 1826% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 97.4 13.2329268293 736% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -112.91 61.2550243902 -184% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 76.2 10.3012195122 740% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.25 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 15.97 8.06136585366 198% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 11.4329268293 490% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 78.0 10.9970731707 709% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 56.0 11.0658536585 506% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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