IELTS 10 Test 3 Writing Task 1 - Academic

The given bar charts depict comparison of students’ activity after graduation and post-graduation except full-time work in UK in 2008. A glance at the charts reveal that rate of unemployment between graduate students was significantly more than postgraduate students. Furthermore, tendency to continue education among graduate students was considerably more than postgraduate ones.

Getting back to the details, we can see number of graduate student who do part-time job was about eight times more than postgraduate students who did this. In addition, rate of graduate students who did voluntary work was about six times more than postgraduate ones. As can be seen, 29665 graduate students continue their education which compared with postgraduate students who were about 2700 people was about thirteen times differences.

In conclusion, we can say the rate of unemployment between graduate students was noticeably high and as a result, they tried to did further study to gain more job opportunities.

Votes
Average: 7 (3 votes)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, so, in addition, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 861.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62745098039 4.92477711251 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19073426786 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56862745098 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.5173824218 43.030603864 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 123.0 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.23603664747 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 61.2550243902 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.3012195122 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 11.4140731707 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.5 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 153 200
No. of Characters: 832 1000
No. of Different Words: 89 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.517 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.438 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.061 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 59 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.222 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.568 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.753 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.335 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4