IELTS Writing Task 1 17 04 2021 The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where rele

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IELTS Writing Task 1-17/04/2021
The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture compares the habit of 5 aged groups getting informed about everyday news on the microblogging radio and social networks in 2014.
Overall, it can lee seen that the proportion of people using microblogging always had the lowest percentage in every age. Another noticeable figure is that the rate of youngsters listening to radio sharply rose while the number for updating news by social networks sustainably decreased from the middle age brackets.
Initially, after slightly increasing from 20% to well above 20% the microblogging group tapered off to nearly a half of 10 proportion for senior dwellers. People who were aged l0 to 29 tended to spend a great amount of time on social networks which consistently remained at 80% while this figure for the elderly group strongly decline by a quarter, doubling those of microblogging in 2014.
Regarding radio, 10 - 17-year-olds had the so strongest increase compared to two remain access from 40% to considerably over than 90% and unchangeability in adolescence, grown-ups, and middle-aged populace then drop back to nearly 190%, doubled the proportion from its beginning.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 44, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'so the strongest'.
Suggestion: so the strongest
...arding radio, 10 - 17-year-olds had the so strongest increase compared to two remain access ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
regarding, so, then, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 953.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 180.0 196.424390244 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29444444444 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02681765275 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.677777777778 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 282.6 283.868780488 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.341364879 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.833333333 112.824112599 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0 22.9334400587 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.23603664747 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102120167883 0.215688989381 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580799764023 0.103423049105 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376215894694 0.0843802449381 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0721581614529 0.15604864568 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385065973025 0.0819641961636 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.2329268293 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 61.2550243902 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.3012195122 146% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 11.4140731707 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.06136585366 117% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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