the line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by louie on Sun, 11/24/2019 - 14:31

The line chart concerned displays the different motives of people relocating to the main city of a particular country from 2000 to 2015.

Overall the graph suggests that the main cause why people moved was for employment reasons, while the minor one was for adventure purposes.

During the first 10 years moving for employment and study motives grew gradually. In 2010 the first reached the highest pick above all the motives (above 90,000 people) and then proceeded to decrease, at the same time the second reason had a sharply increase causing the two reasons to meet at the same rate ( a little above 85,000 people) in 2015.

Adventure rose slowly and consistently (from more than 10,000 people to about 15,000) as a reason of moving to the capital city of a particular country. Relocating for family or friends motivations increased gradually and steady and displayed a gently rise from 2005 to 2010 (from about 15,000 people to more than 20,000 people) for then keeping a constant and slow growth up until 2015.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 239, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('sharply') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
... at the same time the second reason had a sharply increase causing the two reasons to meet at the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the two reasons to meet at the same rate a little above 85,000 people in 2015. ...
^^
Line 7, column 242, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gently') instead an adjective, or a noun ('rise') instead of another adjective.
...ased gradually and steady and displayed a gently rise from 2005 to 2010 from about 15,000 peo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 845.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91279069767 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41213216006 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575581395349 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.4808009779 43.030603864 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.833333333 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6666666667 22.9334400587 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166680882996 0.215688989381 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974520080363 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646988851205 0.0843802449381 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11381129052 0.15604864568 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448695789712 0.0819641961636 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.2329268293 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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