The line graph below gives information about men and women smokers in Bhutan from 1960 to 2000 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words

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The line graph below gives information about men and women smokers in Bhutan from 1960 to 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

» You should write at least 150 words.

The provided line graph gives an insight about men and women smokers in Bhutan.The vertical axis represents the proportion of smokers and the horizontal axis indicates over a 40 years period from 1960 to 2000.

First of all, in 1960, the ratio of male smokers in Bhutan was very highest as compare with females but they loose their interest in smoking and declined steadily to 580 in 1975 from 600 in 1960.However,in the same time period from 1960 to 1975,the women smokers showed their more interest for smoking so they risen very rapidly and reached the peak point of 350 smokers in 1975.

Furthermore, around 200 female smokers decreased gradually till 1990 from 1975.Whereas,the proportion of male smokers dropped dramatically and plunged to the lowest point of 400 smokers in 1990.In the year 1995 and 2000, the number of male and female smokers were approximately constant in these two years.

Overall, it indicates that the more preference was given to smoking by women as compare with men in all the years.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, so, whereas, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 855.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65881937609 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590643274854 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 244.8 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 22.4926829268 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.9224699455 43.030603864 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 213.75 112.824112599 189% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.75 22.9334400587 186% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.75 5.23603664747 282% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190643880235 0.215688989381 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120785459844 0.103423049105 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718952039563 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120785459844 0.15604864568 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718952039563 0.0819641961636 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.5 13.2329268293 178% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.77 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 10.3012195122 168% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.61 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.4329268293 236% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.9970731707 171% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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