The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in a particular country from 1978 to 2008

The provided diagram depict information about the the propotion of people who belong to the 14 to 50 age group in a nation during the period between 1978 and 2008.
It is evident that the percentage of cinema visitors insubstantially declined from 1078 to 2008, while the number of population who went to the cinema obviously increased.
An inspection of the data in the first diagram clearly show among all the figure, the highet was obeserved in 1978, which belonged to youngsters. In the first of the period, the quantity of people in early adulthood was as twice as than population more than 50 years old when it peaked at 90%. Cinema visitors of the middle aged took place in 3rd in 1978 when it made up 60%.
After 20 years, while the proportion of juveniles gradually climbed up to 83%, achieving the first placs among all. While, the percentage of the middle aged remained stable, there was a fall to 70% of people who from 25 to 34 years old. Smilarly, the quantity of people more than 50 years old also stayed unchanged with 40%.
In the last period, while the number of people in early adulthood reached plateau, there was a drop to 80% of teenagers . Although the proportion of people who more than 50 years old also ascended, the increase was significant enough, so it stood at last position. The data of people who fall between 35 to 49 years old clearly decreased to 50%, which was same as than the statistic of people more than 50 years old.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1201.0 965.302439024 124% => OK
No of words: 262.0 196.424390244 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58396946565 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47998537472 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 106.607317073 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488549618321 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 349.2 283.868780488 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7819133744 43.030603864 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.181818182 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8181818182 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.36363636364 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140308855671 0.215688989381 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672111602308 0.103423049105 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826423944855 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110831259198 0.15604864568 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777497024542 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 40.7170731707 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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