Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do a vacational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
it is true that the number of young people who have pursued academic study increase substantially recently. However, not all of job need undergraduate students but some of them prioritize people having more practical experience and skills. I believe that going to university for academic study or doing a vocational training depend on what sort of job you want to work in the future.
There a couple of supporting ideas for the view of academic pursuit. The transparent proof is that most of high-ranking management positions in well-known conglomerates necessitate academic study. These intellectual personnels are suitably qualified to work in professional fields as well as have a superb vision, strategy and management skill. Besides, some other careers relate to health or people such as doctors, teachers or engineers must graduate from universities or colleges. they will become an erudite expert in their own field. Doctor, for example, is the job need much more years attending in class, and they have to internship in hospitals to enhance experience and skill. if the doctor is not trained well and careful, some negative effective will be happening.
On the other hands, I am convinced that it is not necessary study at university to seek a job, but people joining vocational training will have applied for a position. Firstly, if a large number of youngsters enroll in vocational training courses, workforce misbalance can be cope with. Currently, more and more universities allow students being under qualified to involve in. Futhermore, some students have a liking for practicing and experiencing rather study theories and subjects at school. it is untrue that they are not intelligent but they are talented in different jobs, such as manual work. As a result, parents and teachers should encourage and orient them to study a vocational training course early. One example is Thomas Edison, who did not take part in any schools and studied himself at home, invented more than 2,000 inventions in his whole life.
In conclusion, I agree that choosing academic study or vocational training depend people’s decision about their future career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, sort of, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.0 186% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 1.00243902439 798% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 6.8 279% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 5.60731707317 428% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 965.302439024 189% => OK
No of words: 345.0 196.424390244 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29275362319 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 3.73543355544 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90429864866 2.65546596893 109% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 106.607317073 187% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576811594203 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 283.868780488 201% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 8.94146341463 201% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9919635523 43.030603864 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.444444444 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94444444444 5.23603664747 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 3.70975609756 297% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258132790031 0.215688989381 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754998147632 0.103423049105 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569412345384 0.0843802449381 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16002621862 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0404776835396 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.2329268293 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 11.4140731707 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 40.7170731707 233% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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