The maps below give information about a school site in 2004 and the planning of the same school in 2010

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The maps below give information about a school site in 2004 and the planning of the same school in 2010

The maps illustrate data on a school site in 2004 and some proposed changes to the school in 2010.
It is clear that the principal changed to the school was the expand of some buildings while it is also noticeable that the trees were remained untouched.
Looking at the maps of Hogwarts grammar school, as it was 2010, we can clearly see that a new car park was constructed which was located in the North west. In addition the main road which leaded to the outside in 2004, was redesigned to connect the two car parks together.
In 2010, the sport field was reduced in size to make room for the extension of the school buildings which was divided into three sections in 2007. The walking path from the school building to the sport field had been demolished in order to build a new path to connect all of the school buildings

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 58, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...the principal changed to the school was the expand of some buildings while it is also noti...
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Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...which was located in the North west. In addition the main road which leaded to the outsi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 268, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...in order to build a new path to connect all of the school buildings
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, so, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 676.0 965.302439024 70% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44736842105 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29804053592 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565789473684 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 188.1 283.868780488 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.36195996 43.030603864 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.666666667 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244823462034 0.215688989381 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145268297162 0.103423049105 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.127874028417 0.0843802449381 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186588098812 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139096881149 0.0819641961636 170% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.94 61.2550243902 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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