The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps of the centre of the towns of Islip give information about the city currently and in the future. Overall, a lot of modifications can be observed during the forecast development.

First of all, according to the current map the centre is close to a countryside. A main rode is shared by houses, a school, several shops and a park.

Looking more closely at the map predicting the future development of the city, a lot of changes can be noticed. The size of the centre will increase in an oval shape, therefore, the countryside will disappear. Moreover, the single road will be replaced by a bigger dual carriageway. A pedestrian way will be shared by central area. New houses will be built with new facilities such as a bus station and a parking. The shops will be grouped in a shopping mall. The next point is the garden area which will be smaller. As the city will have more people the school will be bigger.

To sum up, between the actual map of the Islip town centre and the future planned development, a lot of reconstruction are predicted. On the other hand the city will be bigger with more facilities. On the other hand, the park will be reduced and the countryside will disappear. The city will have changed a great deal.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 518, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the garden area which will be smaller. As the city will have more people the scho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, look, moreover, therefore, such as, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 1.00243902439 1496% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 0.0 5.60731707317 0% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1027.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 224.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58482142857 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72536141935 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517857142857 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 319.5 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 14.0 4.33902439024 323% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.0274068523 43.030603864 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 64.1875 112.824112599 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.0 22.9334400587 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0907791022103 0.215688989381 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0381104187636 0.103423049105 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643073797233 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0881146956469 0.15604864568 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511205622812 0.0819641961636 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.1 13.2329268293 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 40.7170731707 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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