More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicine should be encouraged.
To what extent do you agree?
More individuals are suffering from health problems which cannot be cured by modern medicines due to a modern lifestyle. Therefore, some people believe that traditional medicine should be returned to use. I disagree with this opinion and this essay will explain why in detail.
Traditional medicine is made out of natural resources such as trees or flowers, but in today’s time, these ingredients cannot be prevented from contamination due to the increasing problems related to the climate and water sources. Thus, this will affect the overall effectiveness of traditional medicine, making it ineffective in curing diseases. This is because of the changes in the effectiveness of medicine which are caused by factors resulting from current problems related to nature, including polluted water or contaminated soil for plants. Mint, for example, is a tree famous for curing fever; if planted in polluted soil, its nutrition could literally change from being beneficial to wrecking havoc on people’s health.
The increase in people suffering from incurable health problems is not the result of modern medicine ineffectiveness, but is due to the current unhealthy lifestyle. Therefore, there is no need to encourage the use of traditional medicine. If people want to prevent themselves from incurable chronic diseases, they need to change their lifestyles first. If they do not attempt to do so, traditional or modern medicine could not save their lives from these diseases. Living healthier can improve people’s mentality and health significantly without too much reliance on natural or artificial medicines. For instance, people who smoke a lot will have less possibility of survival as they face a high risk of lung cancer.
In conclusion, I believe that the encouragement to return to traditional medicine is unnecessary since its cleanness cannot be preserved due to the increasing pollution in nature nowadays. Furthermore, traditional or modern medicine will be rendered useless in curing untreatable chronic diseases if people have no intention of changing to a better lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 1.00243902439 1297% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 5.60731707317 339% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 33.7804878049 139% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 965.302439024 183% => OK
No of words: 323.0 196.424390244 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48297213622 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0569114491 2.65546596893 115% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 106.607317073 165% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544891640867 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 283.868780488 200% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3297651237 43.030603864 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.066666667 112.824112599 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.23603664747 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 1.13902439024 878% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.439348714411 0.215688989381 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152956868333 0.103423049105 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118533000475 0.0843802449381 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298065380038 0.15604864568 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11358583945 0.0819641961636 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.2329268293 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 61.2550243902 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 11.4140731707 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 40.7170731707 223% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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