A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Unity is diversity. Everyone are equal and are tend to be treated equally. I can partially agree with the statementmade by the author. If there is a proper structure that the different subjects and topics being involved in the school is made before head it helps students and teachers as well as parents to prepare before head for whats going to come in their way. But what if the student is not interested in a subject that is enforced in a curriculum.
School plays an important role in a child's life. It has the audacity to mold a kid to a better person. It teaches us about not only some lessons but also enlightens us to choose a best carrer path that draws the kid to learn more about a subject and enlightens him to choose a college and a degree he wants to major in. This can lead them to happiness. If all the curriculum followed by everyone is same then that provides equal knowledge. It even can be used to increase one's ability to understand a thing or subject. There are more chances of fair competition between kids and oppurtunity. However, A Nation consists of different races of people who belong to different religion and adopt varoious ways to lead their life. We can't force every person belonging to a nation to lead their life in the same way. It is well said that " It is important to choose a path that brings happiness to your life rather than the one that brings you stress.
For example, If Einstein was imposed with a curriculum that he didn't even understand and was forced to study the concepts of mathematics that he couldn't even understand the difference betweens 0 and 1 would he been able to discover Bulb. There are kids out there who doesn't like to read a subject or dislike a subject. If they are forced to read one that doesn't give them that inner feeling that they want to understand a topic put that into implementation, Then why study? What is the necessary in studying something that you don't like. In such cases kids tend to compete with their fellow beings and looses their confidence because they don't something they are reading.
If everyone studies the same and chosses same major then cracks a job in the same profession. Then what about different professions. If a student studies Mathematics, Chemistry and Physics then he wants to become engineer because school curriculum consists of same subjects rather than varios subjects. If the student wants to learn about machines when he is at school level but doesn't have the oppurtunity to enlighten or improve his skills because their is not school in the whole nation that teaches about machines that may lead him to give up upon his interests. May be then and their we might miss a " Elon Musk who is the founder of tesla". Maybe if the kid is given with a chance to
In the conclusion, It is important to have fair competition between students by going through a stable curriculum but not at the costs of their happiness. It is important to have healthy competition but not by destroying the future of the students and making them incapable for not even having the assesment to select their major that interests them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s diversity. Everyone are equal and are tend to be treated equally. I can partially ...
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...or in. This can lead them to happiness. If all the curriculum followed by everyone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, well, as for, for example, as well as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 7.0 400% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 6.8 324% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 3.15609756098 665% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 61.0 5.60731707317 1088% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 33.7804878049 231% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 965.302439024 268% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 558.0 196.424390244 284% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64336917563 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 3.73543355544 130% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57902739515 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 106.607317073 233% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.547539520022 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 804.6 283.868780488 283% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 1.53170731707 653% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 1.07073170732 654% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 8.94146341463 302% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7100625988 43.030603864 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.962962963 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.23603664747 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 3.70975609756 377% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134697721003 0.215688989381 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0353143551036 0.103423049105 34% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381646313321 0.0843802449381 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0713858662435 0.15604864568 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224471299256 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 40.7170731707 216% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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