The pictures show the layout of a cinema in 1980 and the same cinema now Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The pictures show the layout of a cinema in 1980 and the same cinema now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram interrupts some of the developed transformations of the cinema from 1980 to 2021.

Overall, we can see exactly that in the first picture the cinema now is more convenient for people's demands while the cinema in 1980 is deserted.

Primarily, despite of several changes, the cinema has had some things that have been used until now. The toilet for male and female have been remained like in 1980. The cinema 1 and cinema 2 have been used. The place where tickets are sell and the canteens have not been removed.

In contrast, there are many developments of the cinema nowadays. Firstly, the car park has been destroyed and a cinema 2 has been moved to its site. Secondly, the food drinks has been moved to another place where the cinema 1 uses to be there. Furthermore, a new room has been built next to the canteen is relax room. A new DVD shop has also built next to the ticket shop. There more cinemas have been constructed and they are located in front of the DVD shop.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 24, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
The diagram interrupts some of the developed transformations of the cinema...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e cinema 1 and cinema 2 have been used. The place where tickets are sell and the ca...
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Line 7, column 307, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'relaxed'.
Suggestion: relaxed
...m has been built next to the canteen is relax room. A new DVD shop has also built nex...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.0 229% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 816.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55865921788 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35493249645 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54748603352 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.4926829268 62% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.6519167575 43.030603864 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.0 112.824112599 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9166666667 22.9334400587 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.23603664747 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210050250865 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925173846493 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067455395495 0.0843802449381 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149843970722 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391034545694 0.0819641961636 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 13.2329268293 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 61.2550243902 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.9970731707 69% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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