the pie chart explain the online shopping sales for retail sectors in canadian country from 2005 to 2010.

Essay topics:

the pie chart explain the online shopping sales for retail sectors in canadian country from 2005 to 2010.

overall,it can be seen that sharp increase the greatest change was food and beverage while the smallest was home furnishing.

the food and beverage was the second greatest of percentage in 2005 it was 22%, but towards to 2010 it increased 10% become 32% and it was the biggest change.then the next raise from all categories was video games 18% in 2005 up around 5% become 23% in 2010.

on other hand,the highest decrease was home furnishing from 25% and then down around 10% to 15% in 2010 Canadian shop.while the last thing in online sales for retail sectors in Canada was decreased,it was electronics and appliance and become small percentage from 35% to 30%,the difference was 5% from earlier.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 587.0 965.302439024 61% => OK
No of words: 120.0 196.424390244 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89166666667 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.30975091965 3.73543355544 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58165267911 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 76.0 106.607317073 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633333333333 0.547539520022 116% => OK
syllable_count: 162.9 283.868780488 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 22.4926829268 178% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.3553160644 43.030603864 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 195.666666667 112.824112599 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.0 22.9334400587 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.23603664747 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184263128511 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116592761507 0.103423049105 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100855037283 0.0843802449381 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116592761507 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100855037283 0.0819641961636 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 13.2329268293 163% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.8 61.2550243902 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 10.3012195122 160% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.06136585366 114% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.4329268293 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.9970731707 164% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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