The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego California and the rest of the world

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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

Submitted by @@mmint on Tue, 08/30/2022 - 10:13

The given pie charts illustrate the water consumption for 3 categories in San diego, california, worldwide.

Overall, it is clear that the percentage of water used for agriculture by the rest of the world is the highest while in San Diego the highest percentage is water consumption for households. The proportion of water used for industry in California is higher than 2 other countries.

The rate of water consumption for agriculture worldwide is the highest, accounting for 69% which is 41% higher than the figure of california. The rate of water used by agriculture is the lowest, at 17%.

The proportion of water used by households in San Diego is the highest in 3 countries, taking up 60% followed by California , at 39%,whereas worldwide the rate of water consumption for domestic use is the lowest, at 8%. The percentage of water used for industry in California is higher than 2 other countries, at 33% . The rate of water consumption for industry in San Diego and worldwide are 23% each.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...% higher than the figure of california. The rate of water used by agriculture is th...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...griculture is the lowest, at 17%. The proportion of water used by households ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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...es, taking up 60% followed by California , at 39%,whereas worldwide the rate of wa...
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Line 8, column 221, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... for domestic use is the lowest, at 8%. The percentage of water used for industry i...
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Line 8, column 317, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...is higher than 2 other countries, at 33% . The rate of water consumption for indus...
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Line 8, column 320, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...higher than 2 other countries, at 33% . The rate of water consumption for industry ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 839.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96449704142 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03585946086 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 68.0 106.607317073 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.402366863905 0.547539520022 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8429117624 43.030603864 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.875 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.23603664747 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267084115728 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155501899086 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902300435127 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215314352285 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095421853015 0.0819641961636 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...% higher than the figure of california. The rate of water used by agriculture is th...
^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...griculture is the lowest, at 17%. The proportion of water used by households ...
^^^
Line 8, column 124, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...es, taking up 60% followed by California , at 39%,whereas worldwide the rate of wa...
^^
Line 8, column 221, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... for domestic use is the lowest, at 8%. The percentage of water used for industry i...
^^^
Line 8, column 317, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...is higher than 2 other countries, at 33% . The rate of water consumption for indus...
^^
Line 8, column 320, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...higher than 2 other countries, at 33% . The rate of water consumption for industry ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 839.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96449704142 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03585946086 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 68.0 106.607317073 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.402366863905 0.547539520022 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 256.5 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8429117624 43.030603864 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.875 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.23603664747 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267084115728 0.215688989381 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155501899086 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0902300435127 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215314352285 0.15604864568 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.095421853015 0.0819641961636 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.