[Revised essay for the following topic]
The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts illustrates the data on the age of the inhabitants in 2000 and 2050 of Yemen and italy.
It is clear that in Yemen people at the working age are expected to rapidly increase and have a young population density. while in italy this group of age is predicted to experience the most dramatic decrease and tends to have an older population.
In 2000, Yemen had the lowest percentages of old people with 3.6% and predicted to grow to 5.7%. while people aged 15 to 59 rise strongly over the research from 45.3% to 50.1% in 2050 as indicated. At the same time, the percentage of under working age dropped to 37% in 2050.
italy in the year 2000, had the percentage of people at the middle group as the largest one in its population rate at 61.6%, however, falls to 46.2% in 2050. Meanwhile, old age group percentage goes up approximately two times at 42.3% in 2050 during the projectION. Whereas, the percentage of the youngest group is predicted to decline significantly with 14.3% in 2000 to 11.5% in 2050.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You should probably use 'illustrate'.
Suggestion: illustrate
The charts illustrates the data on the age of the inhabitants ...
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Suggestion: While
...se and have a young population density. while in italy this group of age is predicted...
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Suggestion: While
...ith 3.6% and predicted to grow to 5.7%. while people aged 15 to 59 rise strongly over...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'rise' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'rises'.
Suggestion: rises
...row to 5.7%. while people aged 15 to 59 rise strongly over the research from 45.3% t...
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Suggestion: Italy
...er working age dropped to 37% in 2050. italy in the year 2000, had the percentage of...
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Suggestion:
...percentage of people at the middle group as the largest one in its population rat...
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Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...at 42.3% in 2050 during the projectION. Whereas, the percentage of the youngest group i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, whereas, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 856.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62702702703 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67415190026 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535135135135 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 254.7 283.868780488 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8443496023 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.7 5.23603664747 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152331896032 0.215688989381 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692451969218 0.103423049105 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456284322352 0.0843802449381 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936343078681 0.15604864568 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0597306160536 0.0819641961636 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 13.2329268293 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 61.2550243902 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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