The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six
industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by
selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Industries 1989. 2009
Manufacturing 15% 9.8%
Retail 11.8% 10.1%
Health care 9.6% 11.3%
Construction 7.6% 8.3%
Education 6.8% 7.5%
Tourism 5.5% 7.3%
The rendered tabular chart illustrates the proportion of employees in six industries,which was manufacturing,retail ,health care,construction, education,tourism in Australia over a 20-year- span(1989-2009).
Overall,it is vivid to see that the manufacturing industry employed the maximum number of people in 1989,while healthcare employed the highest number in2009.In these both year the least number of people worked in tourism industry.
Analyzing into more detail,with a drop of 5.2% from the previous year,the percentage of worker stood at 9.8% in the year 2009.In contrast healthcare ratio of employees followed the rising trend.The proportion stood at9.8 in 1989 as against 11.3% in 2009.Similar hike can be observed in construction(1.6) and education (6.8), in both sector ration of employees increased by 0.7% in2009.
Probing further,minimum percentage of workforce witnessed in tourism,that was recorded as 5.5% and 3.3% in 1989 and 2009 respectively.Likewise regarding retail sector percentage of workforce fell from 11.8% in 1989 to 10.11% in 2009.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
likewise, regarding, while, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 918.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.03947368421 4.92477711251 123% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.88235942198 2.65546596893 146% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.657894736842 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 243.9 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.4926829268 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.9481951161 43.030603864 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 229.5 112.824112599 203% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 38.0 22.9334400587 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 5.23603664747 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 1.69756097561 1119% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176501801213 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100578198584 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476381717143 0.0843802449381 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100578198584 0.15604864568 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476381717143 0.0819641961636 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.0 13.2329268293 196% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 61.2550243902 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 10.3012195122 176% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.34 11.4140731707 161% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.3 8.06136585366 128% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.4329268293 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.9970731707 156% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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