The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.Summa

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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

Submitted by ppatel on Fri, 01/10/2020 - 13:45

The provided table represents the total number of visitors, who visited to Ashdown Museum and the pie charts illustrate an overview of the satisfaction ratio of the people for after and before refurbishment of the museum.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that the higher number of people visited to the museum after refurbishment compared to before refurbishment. In addition, a significant number of people were very dissatisfied before refurbishment; whereas, the greatest number of people were satisfied after refurbishment.

Total 74,000 people visited at the Ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment. At that time, the greatest number of people dissatisfied and it was 40 people, while, 30 people satisfied. Moreover, the number of people, who were very satisfied and very dissatisfied was 15 and 10 people respectively. Only 5 people were not responded in the survey.

On the other hand, 92,000 people visited to the museum during the year after refurbishment. At the same time, the highest number of people satisfied and it was 40; in contrast, 15 people were dissatisfied. The number of very satisfied people were 35. Additionally, the number of very dissatisfied and No response were equally and it was 5 people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, whereas, while, in addition, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1042.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28934010152 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12538693526 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421319796954 0.547539520022 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 319.5 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.238902719 43.030603864 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7272727273 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9090909091 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 5.23603664747 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240573052131 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125395930422 0.103423049105 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539669107439 0.0843802449381 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178454570717 0.15604864568 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237130746112 0.0819641961636 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.06136585366 97% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.4329268293 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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