The table below shows the worldwide market share of mobile phone market for manufacturers in the years 2005 and 2006.

Submitted by SOBIROV.L on Mon, 10/15/2018 - 17:10

A glance at the statistical information provided represents about global marketing share of the cell phone campanies during the period 2005 and 2006.

Overall, the percentage of Nokia was the higher then all other companies in 2005 and 2006. In addition companies as Motorolla , Samsung and some another firm had significant rates then other companies indicated in the table.

It can be clearly seen through the diagram that the biggest proportion is in the Nokia with almost one third in 2005 and 35 percent in 2006.However cmpanies like Motorolla and Samsung also had considerable number of market sharing with 17.7 to 12.7 in first year and 21.1 to 11.8 in the next year.Also evident is the fact that Sone Ericsson and L.G had almost at similar level in 2005 with 6.3 and 6.7 . However figure of Sony Ericsson figured out by 7.4 and L.G dropped slightly to 6.3 . The most striking point is that the rate of some other companies made up to 19.2 in 2005 and 16.2 in 2006 altogether.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, then, third, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 816.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77192982456 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53697716541 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625730994152 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 234.0 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.834218509 43.030603864 255% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 136.0 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 22.9334400587 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200165747407 0.215688989381 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892888152987 0.103423049105 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08141874255 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142586455616 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0761150929257 0.0819641961636 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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