IELTS Writing Task 1 #110
IELTS Tip
It is quite common for IELTS Writing Task 1 to involve more than one piece of information relating to the topic. For example, you may get two or three pie charts that you must compare. The pie charts may represent different years and show trends over time. In this case, you will have to describe the changes and similarities/differences between the pie charts.
Related Topic: Comparing pie charts
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Expenditure by local authorities in Someland
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Model answer
The charts show how much local authorities spent on a range of services in Someland in three separate years: 1980, 1990 and 2000.
In all three years, the greatest expenditure was on education. But while K-12 education saw a fall from 25% in 1980 to only 18% of spending in 2000, higher education remained the largest proportion, reaching 45% of total spending in 1990 and ending at 40% in 2000.
Expenditure on health and human resources had increased to 20% by 1990 before decreasing to only 10% by the end of the period. In contrast, the share of transportation saw an opposite trend. This cost decreased to only 6% of total expenditure in 1990 but rose dramatically in 2000 when it represented 22% of the total budget. Similarly, the cost of environmental services saw a rising trend, growing from only 4% to 9% by 2000.
Overall, higher education constituted the largest cost to local authorities, and while spending increased for transportation and environmental services, there were corresponding drops in expenditure on health and human resources and K-12 education.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, similarly, so, while, at least, for example, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 6.8 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 33.7804878049 163% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 965.302439024 168% => OK
No of words: 314.0 196.424390244 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17834394904 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01057004388 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 106.607317073 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528662420382 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 283.868780488 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.5256020366 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.625 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 3.83414634146 339% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450561514162 0.215688989381 209% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145522428142 0.103423049105 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.242143575146 0.0843802449381 287% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181268928295 0.15604864568 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.26609819661 0.0819641961636 325% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 40.7170731707 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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