You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the number of people who emigrated in five different countries over the period 2004 to 2007. What stands out from the chart is that Australia was the most popular destination as opposed to remaining nations.
Regarding Australia, in 2004, the number of visitors stood at just over 40,000. However, over the next two years, there was a marked rise in the numbers to around 52,000, making it the maximum amount in 2006. And the quantity remained around this level until the end of the period.
Turning to Spain, even though the amount remained fairly stable for the first two years, the total figure dropped gradually to finish just under 30,000, which was still the highest total compared to New Zealand, the USA and France. While New Zealand witnessed around 20,000 visitors each year, the total amount of guests in the USA fluctuated between 20,000 and 25,000. Although, the proportion of foreigners hit a peak of around 25,000 in 2005, the net figure decreased sharply to approximately 15,000 in 2006 representing the most least total than all four destinations.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
The bar chart illustrates the number of people who emigrated in five different countries over the period 2004 to 2007.
The bar chart illustrates the number of British people who emigrated to five different countries over the period 2004 to 2007. //this is more clear
Although, the proportion of foreigners hit a peak of around 25,000 in 2005, the net figure decreased sharply to approximately 15,000 in 2006 representing the most least total than all four destinations. //this is for which country?
and where is France?
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 10
No. of Words: 182 200
No. of Characters: 887 1000
No. of Different Words: 113 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.673 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.874 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.407 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 69 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 38 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 18 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.393 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.408 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.64 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'least' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: least
...imately 15,000 in 2006 representing the most least total than all four destinations.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, regarding, still, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 915.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02747252747 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47953220226 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.642857142857 0.547539520022 117% => OK
syllable_count: 252.0 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9529534772 43.030603864 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.375 112.824112599 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 22.9334400587 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.23603664747 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0806789970764 0.215688989381 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416442403964 0.103423049105 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295760111337 0.0843802449381 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0649884792038 0.15604864568 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321128701998 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.2329268293 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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