A Canadian friend recently sent you a present by post. You want to thank him/her.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter-Say how you felt when you received the present-Describe what you like about it-Explain how you will use the present

Hi John,

What a fabulous surprise that I have last Thursday! when the postman knocked my door "Mr.Hendam, You have a parcel from Canda!" the postman said.

I could n't imagine that it was from you. Really, I just write to you to thank you for such an amazing gift.
Once I unwrapped it, surprisingly, I jumped with screaming. it seems to me that you still remember the kind of watch I admire. that is the one we saw together in the shopping center located in the midtown'small, isn't it?.

Come on Canuck! I like its style and shape it could fit me more with casual clothing. that could be perfect in going out and mingling with my pals. I will let them take photos of me wearing that watch, send these photo for you!

I will keep in touch with you in the coming weeks about how the response of such a perfect watch in my love story !
love you man, say hi to Julia and Amanda, I will be back in 3 months , see you

Best wishes,

Hindam

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 53, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...ous surprise that I have last Thursday! when the postman knocked my door 'Mr.He...
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Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Hendam
...en the postman knocked my door 'Mr.Hendam, You have a parcel from Canda!' th...
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Line 6, column 60, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... surprisingly, I jumped with screaming. it seems to me that you still remember the...
^^
Line 6, column 127, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...ll remember the kind of watch I admire. that is the one we saw together in the shopp...
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Line 6, column 211, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...ing center located in the midtownsmall, isnt it?. Come on Canuck! I like its styl...
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Line 8, column 87, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: That
...could fit me more with casual clothing. that could be perfect in going out and mingl...
^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Love
...uch a perfect watch in my love story ! love you man, say hi to Julia and Amanda, I ...
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Line 11, column 69, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...a and Amanda, I will be back in 3 months , see you Best wishes, Hindam
^^
Line 16, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hs , see you Best wishes, Hindam
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, still, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 32.9175257732 122% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 785.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 180.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.36111111111 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66284150148 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43260194606 2.54303337028 96% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.622605031667 104% => OK
syllable_count: 225.0 290.88556701 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.360824742268 554% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.3909165814 44.8134815571 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2222222222 76.5299724578 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 4.34317383033 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289139502737 0.216113520407 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10484913516 0.0766984524023 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103678771048 0.0603063233224 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162828782946 0.12726935374 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0841012639208 0.0580467560999 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 8.37731958763 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 41.2886597938 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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